Kicking off a mini 4-parter, concluding with a special Sunday bonus strip.
I would have loved an ending with Dad having done something clever, like say sending the African leader a lottery ticket (or say shares of a defunct company).
What I meant is that the joke in its current form is too straight. A bit of twist in the last panel would have worked wonders. :)
Oh, but there IS a twist coming… you just gotta be patient Hari. ;)
I guess I’ll wait for the full strip, then :)
Anyway on a general note, II actually loved your single panel toons – excellent creativity and you were forced to come up with a brilliant punch line or some truly amusing scenes and some of them are true classics.
Not to say that your multi-panel toons aren’t good, but they sometimes lack the full force of the humour of the kind found in those ones.
Thanks, Hari. WIth multi-panel strips – especially those that form a storyline – there are crests and waves. Pacing is very important. Some gags are going to be more blatant, than others.
With single panel ‘toons, just like you mention – you have to get the punchline in fast.
They’re completely different animals to write for, in any sense.
I agree. I admire your experimentation with different forms of writing.
Keep it up… I’m looking forward to this storyline’s “punch”.
I picture uniformed men in an office in Nigeria, sitting around piles of money. One says to the other “I just don’t understand it, we’ve been trying to give away this money for years but no one answers our email….”
Three quick comments:
1) I, too, am looking forward to the conclusion of this motif as you allude to in the comments.
2) Daniel Lovejoy – LOL! That really would be funny, even if Krishna chooses to go another route.
3) I have an acquaintance who by all accounts should be one of the last people to fall for something like the Nigerian-style scam. He has a Bachelor’s and two Master’s degrees. My point is – not at all the type of person I’d expect to go for this. He became a widower a couple of years ago, I think that made him a bit unbalanced. At any rate – all the investments he had made (plus the life insurance from his wife’s passing) all went up in smoke because he fell for one of these scams. I still can’t believe there are people who fall for this. However, like spam – I guess there’s enough people to respond that it makes it worth their while to try this.
Daniel – you read my mind. :) More to come..,